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Judith E Boroto's avatar

A very intereting concept. I like it and look forward to next Sunday's segment. A look into the possible future of our part of this land. Thanks.

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Adam Hostetter's avatar

Wonderful! I love it! Can’t wait for more.

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Beth Allen's avatar

What a great beginning to your novel! Can’t wait to find out the adventures you have in store for Luna. Grandpa sounds like a pretty cool guy 💕

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Julie McGinn's avatar

I really enjoyed it, it hooked me! I’ll look forward to the next chapter.

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Robin Polt's avatar

Just a question– how many panels would it take to tell this story in cartoon form?

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David W Fitzsimmons's avatar

45 chapters would make for a standard YA graphic novel

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Bruce's avatar

Wonderful start, one teensy niggle...

"Rin was a two hundred year old pack robot Luna found" If the year is 2100, then Rin was made in 1900...and I must ask where the HECK have my pack robots BEEN all my life!!

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Dean T Umemoto's avatar

Fitz,

I follow you for your biting political comments, but this is a nice bonus. Your tender and thoughtful treatment of a future dystopian world should give deniers pause. I look forward to the next episode.

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Mark Warnken's avatar

Looking forward to ……..how/why your world progresses!

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Janice T Fingado's avatar

So sorry David, but I won't be subscribing. I have enough to cope with, with today's technology; can't do one hundred years from now. Good luck to you, Janice

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Jim McIntosh's avatar

Very moving though very sad apocaylptic assessment of life to come if we fail to act.

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Beda Lovitt's avatar

Great! I KNEW you can write. This is a treat. Can't wait for Sun.

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Deborah solleveld's avatar

I love the story but the setting is both terrifying and hopeful. Can’t wait for the next chapter.

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Bobbie Howard's avatar

I like the story and would buy the ebook if it exists.

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